Black Ghost

The quiet crunching of snow filled the night. Step by step, Crystal walked in heavy footfalls, seeming to sink deeper each time. Her eyes stayed ahead, with as much focus ...

Thanks guys! sokool15>> I fixed the "even" thing, thanks for catching that...and I changed the hair description. More clear? MM

Actually, I have been in a cave, and a very beautiful one at that. :) It's in a Lebanon (the middle-eastern country, not city) and here are some pictures in ...

Claudette, I totally get the lack of meaning, since I tried too hard to conform this to the purpose of referring to an object. XD I guess I'll just throw ...

Thanks for the comments, guys. ^_^ Fantasyartist>> I totally agree about the "it" thing. I changed it right away, so thanks for catching that. Squallz>> Your comments are so awesome, ...

Oh, I really love the imagery in this one. All your description are very vivid and awesome, and it seemed to flow pretty well too. Not much else I can ...

I don't really see any strong meaning in this poem. All you're basically doing is describing death and destruction, which is a bit boring. Poems need to have a little ...

Yes, like Evanglina said, you just need to make it longer, and expand upon the ideas you already have. Experiment with different words and phrases, so you can come up ...

What I was trying to get across here is that te mother is mentally ill (specifically bipolar), but many bipolar people do not think that there's anything wrong with them. ...

I really, really enjoyed the books. They were all very engaging in my opinion. Except for the last one, I couldn't quite get through it really. *shrugs* I don't know. ...

I don't crit poetry much, but I liked the way you used batteries as a metaphor for life. It worked, at least for me, and it's an interesting way to ...

[spoiler]Yeah, the way that they got into the chamber was a bit weird. I guess I just ignored it because there was so much else going on. But really, how ...

Thanks guys, I'm glad you liked it. The thing is though, I meant this just to be a piece of flash fiction, and I didn't feel I needed to elaborate ...

I guess we'll have to wait until she writes that encyclopedia of all her characters. That should probably clear these questions up. MM

Yeah, this poem didn't really "mean" anything, if that's what you're trying to get at. Just a lot of unpleasant images. MM